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Lyn Chamberlin's avatar

Hi David -- here's what I'd do: “I help communities and organizations give children and families in need the tools to thrive—through education, spiritual growth, and sustainable community building.”

👉 Notice the shift:

Starts with “I help” → makes it active, relatable.

“give… the tools to thrive” → emotional and concrete outcome.

Keeps the three pillars (education, spiritual growth, sustainability) but as supporting proof, not the headline.

Hope this help!

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Nan Tepper's avatar

So clear. And seemingly simple. But people aren’t always great at strutting their true stuff. They need value whisperers like you to draw out the treasures each carries. Clarity!

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